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Text One of the biggest differentiators of essays is the quality of examples; essay that have strong, relevant and relatable examples score well. Above, we have analysed the themes, structure, fluency and quality of logic of the same essay you see below; now we will analyse the quality of examples from this same essay using the following instructions. Instructions: Quality of Examples To begin evaluating an essay's quality of examples, we ought to determine what determines the quality of an essay's examples. There are three traits that determine the quality of examples; strength, relevance and relatability. First, how to determine the strength of an example? This refers to how impactful the example is in supporting the author's argument, often found in the elaboration segment of body paragraphs. As a refresher, elaboration sentences are found in the middle of body paragraphs and they are focused exclusively on explaining the rationale behind the argument, and possibly addressing any rebuttals or issues with the rationale of the argument itself. Thus, strong essays will be impactful and reliable; for example, references to SPECIFIC studies (not just vague references to studies), books, authors and statistics. Weak examples will often be very vague, seem unimportant or niche. Second, the relevance of examples is critical. An example can be super strong but if it's not supporting the actual argument or part of the argument's context, then the example is of little support. Identify the relevance of an example by detecting if the evidence is in the same theme or context as the argument itself. Moreover, see if the example is refers to similar topics as the argument and lastly, if you read the example evidence by itself, could you imagine the kind of argument the author proposed? If yes, then the example is relevant evidence. However, if the examples seem to be about different & distinct themes, contexts, topics and is not integrated well with the argument, it is likely of little relevance. Thirdly, examples that are relatable are much stronger, since the readers of the essay can resonate more with the examples, thus, more inclined to agree with the examples being supportive of the arguments due to a personal, favourable bias. Biases affect everyone, readers included. For the GAMSAT, the readers of the essays are Australian volunteers. Examples that can be readily found in Australian and generally anglophone media, science and content are often more relatable to the audience. Thus, if the examples are more relatable, it's more likely to be well perceived and thus, better examples. However, relatabilty only strengthens examples as long as the examples are strong and relevant first. If the example is very relatable but weak and irrelevant, then relatability doesn't matter at all. However, if the evidence is already strong and relevant, then having the example being relatable makes it truly exceptional. Thus, when assessing an essay's quality of examples look for these three characteristics; if there are no examples at all (regardless of strength, relevance or relatability), then the quality of examples is automatically very poor. If there are some examples but they are all of low strength, relevance and reliability, then they are poor examples. If they are strong but not relevant or relatable, then the example is of poor quality. If they are relevant but not strong or relatable, then the example is of poor quality. If they are relatable but not relevant or strong, then the example is of poor quality. If they are strong and relevant but not relatable, then the example is of good quality. If they are strong, relevant and relatable, then the example is of exceptional quality. Use these instructions to give summarise the feedback of the quality of examples into one of these categories (very poor, poor, good, exceptional) and then explain to the reader in one paragraph why they received this score and how they could improve it following the guidance of these instructions.